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Re: Sale
=D> That wasn't just a poem, it was a performance. I felt that. Loved the beginning and the end, though I think you lost that fast-paced rhythm with the shorter ...
Feb 14, 2005 -
Re: My light skinned lover
I found this difficult to read when it wasn't broken up into seperate lines. Not sure about "You are what mine forever" but I liked this-there is hope!
Feb 14, 2005 -
Re: Blue Strokes
Great description, as usual. The only thing I was unsure about was the sentences continuing into the next stanza, particularly the last time. Good work.
Feb 14, 2005 -
Re: This is Not and Apology (but it is a poem...thats the title)
I agree with Brad. I would have said it myself if I'd known how. This really didn't stand out for me-like Brad said, it could have been written by anybody. ...
Jan 6, 2005 -
Re: Your Hands-A Sonnet
I wrote this with a Shakespearean sonnet in mind. A Shakespearean sonnet has three stanza consisting of four lines with a rhyming scheme of ABAB, and a rhyming couplet. The ...
Jan 6, 2005 -
Re: Your Hands-A Sonnet
Just out of interest, what would you say if it wasn't my first sonnet?
Jan 5, 2005 -
Re: Sorry to love.
Greatness. I did indeed read this more than once. Loved "Will this knife make you listen?/If I point this gun will it make sense?" Well done.
Dec 29, 2004 -
Re: Driftwood
Great imagery, etc etc...yeah, I liked it very much. Not much else to say, really. Nearly dinner time...yum, turkey! um, yeah. bye! Keep writing.
Dec 25, 2004 -
Re: When Eternity isn’t Forever
Not harsh at all, I'd much rather have a construtive comment than you just saying my work was good. And I see what you mean. Thanks loads for all your ...
Dec 24, 2004 -
Re: babygirl
I liked this, loved the tone. I wasn't completely convinced about the bits in brackets. Liked the way you ended it, the last line completed the poem and summed it ...
Dec 24, 2004 -
Re: When Eternity isn’t Forever
Ta :D
Dec 24, 2004 -
Re: incubi (16+)
Loved it. Short but effective. I thought I'd hate it when I read the second line, but great. You're a brave writer, some people wouldn't dare write like that. It's ...
Dec 20, 2004 -
Re: cyber (16+)
You created a great atmosphere. I liked it a lot. Particularly like the beginning and end few lines. Keep writing.
Dec 20, 2004 -
Re: And He Came
I liked the atmosphere of this poem. Good work.
Dec 20, 2004 -
Re: letting you go
T'was pretty good. Didn't blow me away, but I liked "Some girl to give up all that she has/or, by the time you get to her, all that she had". ...
Dec 20, 2004
